Standing Still
There you stand, eyes closed, completely still. A bright morning sun shines on you from behind. A hint of a breeze tickles the tips of your ears. The smell of pine needles and grass. The soft sound of water running over pebbles.
You open your eyes. Twigs crackle softly as you turn around, looking. There’s a small stream just a few steps ahead, stretching endlessly in either direction. The water sparkles in the sunlight. You have to cross the stream, reach the other side. It is narrow enough to just step over. You know you want to. But still you stand, watching the water flow past.
Your eyes blink. The blades of grass rustle as you walk forwards – they’re much longer now. The stream looks bigger, and further away. For some reason, that doesn’t seem strange at all – it’s almost as though you were expecting it. You walk towards it. You’re going to leap over to the other side, of course you are. You know you ought to. But still you stand, watching the water running by.
You give yourself a shake; how long have you been standing? It’s growing dark. The trees make creaking noises as the wind shakes their boughs. The dark water has the silent sound of a river. You can wade across, surely. You know you have to. But still you stand, watching the water surge ahead.
Now wait a second – where did the opposite bank go? There, far ahead in the distance – you can barely see it. The water’s moving much faster now. Little waves dash against the rocks. It smells saline. Perhaps you can row across. You know you need to. But still you stand, watching the water splash over stones.
The wind is whistling through your ears. You’re running towards that huge water body, many fathoms away. The far bank is but a memory. As you reach closer, you can’t remember if you ever learnt to swim. But that’s not important right now. The other side is. That opposite bank – it had it! That thing you’ve always wanted.
As you dive in, water filling your ears and your eyes, your weight taking you to its depths, the suffocating silence seems to ask: did you stand too long?
A bright morning sun shines on two children playing near a rivulet. Shading his eyes against the light, one of them looks towards the water and suddenly exclaims, “Oh look! Someone’s recently been on this side of the stream! Now that’s something that hasn’t happened in a very long time…”
Comments
Nice post. Elaborate? :P
I always find children in stories creepy. For some reason, I'm always reminded of William Golding's Lord of the Flies.
I second Sam. :D
I third Sam and second Minneh.
:P
@Sam: Thanks!
And does that mean it's elaborate or that you want me to elaborate? :P
@Ankur: Ohhh, you made me add another book to my list of Books I've Been Wanting to Read but Keep Forgetting When I'm at a Bookstore :D
@Mini: Thanks!
And does that mean it's elaborate or that you want me to elaborate? :P
@Espera: Thanks!
And does that mean it's elaborate or that you want me to elaborate? :P
I find the entire post creepy and scary. Totally transported me outta HUN100 :D
Oh YEAH. I've been meaning to read Lord of the Flies for eons too.
I can't decide whether to take that as a compliment or not =P
Elaborate kar.
And
"Thanks!
And does that mean it's elaborate or that you want me to elaborate? :P"
was so bugging a reply, that I can't even begin to tell you how bugging it was. :P
And, i'll prolly get a local voda no. activated by the evenin today, so u can call landline se, i'll text it to you.
And mera fresher's is aaj.
Oooooh.
And why was it bugging? D:
You guys were the ones seconding and thirding each other =P
Yes, FINALLY. I tried calling from my landline yesterday also, fail tha. Though Mri told me she got through from her landline to you. And this comment should SO be a wall post :P
Oye, all the best! :D
@Sam: THANK YOU. That's exactly what I meant to say.
And yes. It was INSANELY and INFURIATINGLY bugging. Prolly because I had to read the same damn thing thrice over. Not twice, no. THRICE.
Oh dear =/
Will a sorry cover it then?
Haha yes.
I read my comment again and realised how angry I sounded. Sorry about that. If you're wondering why, just read my latest blog post =D
Yes, I'm shameless when it comes to self-publicity. =P
I'm speechless!! This piece was deep!! (It sounds like me trying fruitlessly to study right before the exams)
I'm not sure if I got the last part with the two children though. Woh wala part elaborate kar. =p
I got it I got it! He made it acrossssss :D That's what the children were saying na, because everyone waits and wait too long and not many do make it to the other side of the stream.
That's my reading, anyway.
Loved this piece, really. The opening para reminded me so vividly of you-know-where. That was what you were picturing, wasn't it? :)
Didn't know "fathom" was a unit of length :O *adds to mental thesaurus*
Love the labels, especially "The Moving Finger"...wish I had thought of that :(
Grrrreat job :D Will send you one of my latest stories soon, can't blog it because of copyright issues =/
@thegirlwithoneheart: Haha, you didn't sound that angry, by the way :P
@TKOTK: Thank you! It sounds like a lot of things to me, which is part of why I like it :)
@wild iris: I was starting to think no one would get the children part! And and, thanks! =D And yes, I think I was basically picturing that place only :)
Whaaat? You didn't? But fathom's, like, everywhere!
You can use it actually, I'm probably gonna remove it coz it kinda doesn't fit for the content :S
That read like a dream! :)
Who knows, it might even have been one :)
Thanks for visiting, by the way!
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